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:new: Now with a reading.

two roads diverged in a soulless dawn
and you pull over,
idling on the shoulder of route 50.
it's a polaroid morning and
the world is as grainy
and sleep-heavy
as your eyes,
and one million miles
is not far enough.
it plays back, filmstrip,
blurred along the length of
optic nerves,
and here you are:
facing a choice between
on
and
out.
and this?
this loosejointed, hollowbodied
weightless ache--
this is what
gone
feels like.
Felt good, this.

Inspired by this: [link]

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BlueSoulGreenMind Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014
This was breathtaking. I listened to it without ever looking back on the page. The abrupt end hit me harder.
I thought (while listening) it would be longer but that's okay,
I liked that I was left thinking that because it made the word gone sound so much heavier.
You said all you needed to say.
The imagery was lovely it encompassed your inspiration.
Your inspiration infused image encompassed your feeling.
Everything echo'd back and forth.
My favorite part was the description of what gone feels like.
I love this.
When you wrote with thanks to frost I first thought of Robert Frost but now I'm thinking of frost on a window, I'm thinking of frost itself and it does give that same feeling of suspended animation, of purgatory, of limbo that "gone" feels like.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love your voice.
I've already faved this.
I'm sad 'cause I can't do it again.
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Laitma Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Student General Artist
Uoooohhhhhhhhh, love the ending phrase, so beautiful.  <3
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
:heart:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013   Writer
Top-notch work, this one. I thought about Frost (used to read his work a lot) and how he may react. If only he wasn't "gone." :+fav:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
Thanks so much. :heart:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013   Writer
:iconyourewelcomesignplz:
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Hiland-Rose Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Professional Artisan Crafter

All at once familiar but edgy....nicely done, I love it when a writer plays with an idea!  This is good.

 

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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
Thanks so much!
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is fabulous. :heart:
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