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And darling, I've been gone for a long, long time. Your eyes
are still that steely gunpowder blue, but your hair has grown long,
and there's a softer curve to your waist
and freckles on your shoulder I don't remember,
and I think,
God.
What have I missed?

You tell me about the weddings
the divorces. You tell me
about the babies
and the losses, and how last year
your dog died--easy, in his sleep--
and there is a hollow lack in you,
a space reserved for things that won't come back.
Long ago, was there a space like that
for me?
When did it collapse--when did it
fold in on itself
under the weight of things that matter more?

I tell you about Cambodia. I paint
the jungles for you, breathe the crushing wet heat
of it into your lungs. I tell you
about the kids in Africa
and how the heat is different there--
belligerent and fierce.
I tell you how much you would have liked Barbados,
and how much you would have hated Rome.
And I remember all the things I
can't tell you--all the things I don't have words for
even after the wandering,
even after years and years,
and I think,
God.
What have I missed?
I really like this one.
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Laitma Nov 16, 2012  Student General Artist
Auuuuuuugh, and you have every right to, goshdarnit! This is just gorgeous, I love every line of this piece, the flow of it is terrific and the reiterated lines are perfect. :heart:
Ah, and your reading of this is superb, too. Really brings it to life.
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:icondisrhythmic:
Oh gosh, thank you so much, darling. <3 <3 <3
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:iconthatlibraryguy:
You're one of the only writers to ever make me tear up... and this... so sad. I love it.
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:icondisrhythmic:
Thank you so much. <3
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PrideofPanem Nov 8, 2012  Student General Artist
I like this as well :D Amazing job!
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TheMoorMaiden Nov 8, 2012  Student Writer
I like this a lot. :) I love how you've made such an ordinary conversation into a lovely piece of poetry. You manage to tell a much wider story and describe to us very well rounded characters in so few words. Great work, you should like it! :D
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:icondisrhythmic:
Thank you so much, love. <3
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TheMoorMaiden Nov 9, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome. :)
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Sammur-amat Nov 8, 2012   General Artist
I love how I am in the moment with the narrator.
I love the way you write.
I love youuu. :tighthug:
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