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sometimes the mermaids will watch the sailorboys, and green ocean eyes will take in the powerful shoulders and the instinctive sense of balance, and sometimes one will fall in love. and sometimes this love will fill up her chest so much it hurts, and sometimes it will make her reckless--make her swim silently up to the sides of the boats and reach up (carefully, with just the barest sound of water droplets tumbling back into the depths) and rest her arms on the wood that's long since been worn smooth from salt and sun. and sometimes the sailorboy will turn, but he'll see nothing--but when he hauls in his net it will be brimming, straining at the seams, and he will look out over the ocean for a moment, all the way to the blank horizon, and sometimes he will wonder.

and it's easy to love the girls that swim up from the bottom of the ocean with nets knotted up in their teeth, nets full of minnows and tuna and dolphins--but it's easy to ignore the dolphins--and to untangle them gently from those sea-salt mouths and haul the dripping cords up and in; and it's easy to wonder where the seafoam eyes have gone after he's stowed everything and turned around and they've disappeared, but it's even easier to stop wondering, and easier still to leave, and easy to trade the dead wet fish for drink--and it's so easy to drink, and the walk down to the docks is easy, too--and so he sits at the very fringes of the ocean and stares out at the glistening breakers and wonders, for a moment, about those seagirls; but drinking is easy, so he drinks; and he forgets.

most times, she will miss him. and sometimes she will wonder. sometimes, she will get angry--tempestuously angry--and the empathetic ocean will roil and snarl, and in the morning when the fishermen go down to the docks they will see the fragile bodies of squid and jellyfish washed up among the rocks like so many withered leaves. but sometimes she will cry, and that's when the albatrosses mourn in the dead of night, and most times the sleeping village will close up its windows because it is the saddest sound they've ever heard.

most times, the mermaids fall in love with the sailorboys with the bluest eyes; the ones who are all ocean and no heart--who are deep and steady and comfortable but so, so cold underneath. they love those boys and they will wish they never did--wish they never had hearts to begin with--because like the ocean, these sailorboys will always choose the swiftest way to shore, no matter how the wind howls.
I don't know where this came from but my God did it want out. And it's not autobiographical, this time.

So. Sailorboy is the closest thing I have to a recurring character. This is not him. My sailorboy is an ass for sure, but not this much.

Is the repetition too much?
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InjuredGuardian Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014
Well written. And well read.
An excellent piece.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
Thank you very much. :heart:
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Kallios Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013
So. Damn. Beautiful.

I went to Chincoteague Island for a week in summer, managed to fall in love with the ocean, and then had to leave and I swear I left pieces of my heart on the beach where the tide could wash over them and pour salt into the wound.

But bah, enough about my insignificant life. Boys are cruel and sometimes seas really do have hearts, but far too often the sailorboys will leave those hearts broken and weeping. So yes. I wholeheartedly agree with this entire piece, and wish that I could write like this because daaaaammmnnn I do not have the raw talent that you do.

There is not enough repetition, dear. Keep writing.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013
Holy hell, I love you. Thank you so much.

Get back to that ocean. :heart:
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Professional Writer
you're the surprise of the week here [link] - :rose:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
Thank you so much, love! :heart:
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Professional Writer
:rose:
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flummo Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Student Writer
This is just ahfajklgg (read: no proper words) and filled with tender yet terrible melancholy. This is beautiful, miss. And the last stanza is absolutely perfect.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013
Oh gosh, thank you so much! :heart:
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ColoringTheRain Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I've probably told you this before but your poems are some of the greatest things to read out loud. :) It just flows~
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
Thank you so much! :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013   General Artist
I can't even begin to tell you how much I am in love with this. :love:
Stars+ Oceans= Dee's heart and soul <3 <3 <3
You are just far beyond beautiful, inside and out , word and deed, dizzylove. :tighthug:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Oh, Dee, you have the best kind of oceansoul--a quiet, peaceful little bay full of shorebirds and seashells and tidepools and so many other wonderful things. :heart:

You're a dear. Thank you so much. :huggle:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   General Artist
Gosh you make me sound so very beautiful, almost like a dream (I wish I could see myself that way, too) :giggle:
I see you with same eyes, love, believe me :tighthug:

Always a pleasure seeing your name in my inbox, dizzykins :heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
You are that beautiful, darling. :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013   General Artist
Ack. :iconnouplz: :heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
:icondwightshruteplz: FALSE.

:heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013   General Artist
:iconyoukiddingmeplz:
:icontinyheartsplz:
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is most absolutely beautiful. I cannot contain my love for the beautiful salty ocean-y imagery and the tragic unrequited romance and just the general loveliness of your work.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Oh, thank you so much, love! :heart:

(Oceany imagery is by far the best. ^^)
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oceany imagery is guaranteed to be effective if used well and you certainly do :meow:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"most times, the mermaids fall in love with the sailorboys with the bluest eyes; the ones who are all ocean and no heart--who are deep and steady and comfortable but so, so cold underneath. they love those boys and they will wish they never did--wish they never had hearts to begin with--because like the ocean, these sailorboys will always choose the swiftest way to shore, no matter how the wind howls."

holy moly...:love:

I-I just love this. The first sentence really captured my attention...

I do have a problem with the lack of capitalization since it's poetry in prose form, but it's a breath-taking piece nonetheless...
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Thank you so much! :heart:
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idefix5360 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
There is something about your choice of words and about the *way* you read them... it makes me so unbearably sad... and yet, when I think of the ocean, of the sailorboys, of the way the land and sea meet on the shore, it all makes perfect sense. Is there any other explanation for the way the sea interacts with the land?
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Oh, thank you. :heart:

Exactly--always reaching but never getting any closer.
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Laitma Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student General Artist
Oooooooooooooh, I always have this thing for your prose, mmm~ :heart: The pacing of this is... interesting, in rushes that feel a little breathless, a little run-on, but in a good way, I think. The second paragraph is really lovely, and the last, as well: "the ones who are all ocean and no heart", mmmmmm there's just something about that~ :heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Oh gosh, Lai, thank you sooo much! :heart:
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Pencil-Wolf Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student General Artist
Ah, I love the last paragraph? Stanza? (what DO you call those things in prose poetry, anyway?) And I also particularly like the "fragile bodies of squid.." sentance. (:
Beautiful!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Stanzagraph, maybe? :shrug:

Thanks so much! :heart:
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Pencil-Wolf Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student General Artist
XD I like that word. I just might use it!

You're welcome. C:
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
thanks for sharing the reading - :rose:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Thank you for listening. :heart:
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student Writer
This is beautiful. So very beautiful. Thank you for sharing.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Thank you for reading. :heart:
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
the images play like a movie in my head. for
less feelings more imagery. this is love. now

audio. make it happen.
as in yesterday.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Thank you. :heart:

Patience, patience...
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
:heart:

me? virtuous?
hahah ;P
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:icondisrhythmic:
disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
No, just hedonistic--and good things come to those who wait, you know.
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
I'll be good. Maybe. haha
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
it has a really nice flow to it, an interesting easiness and a heartache.

lovely read.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Thank you so much. :heart: For the fave as well. :huggle:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome :hug:

are you going to read this one?
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Yup. ;) [link]
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
I love this. And I almost never like prosetry. :)
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Thank you, and thanks for faving. :heart:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this. is. absolutely gorgeous! I love the imagery, and the repetition is definitely not too much! It works perfectly.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Thanks so much! :D
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem!
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