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i read some poetry
just for the sound--for the words lilting up and down
and the thick, honeysepia
polaroids unmisting in my head.
those are the poems i never understand
and the only conclusion i can draw is:
there is apparently
some supernova poetic awakening that comes
with the loss of virginity
and basically i need to get laid.
Observations.
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:iconhaphazardmelody:
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I snorted when I read that ending.
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:icondisrhythmic:
disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013
:bow:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013   General Artist
brilliant piece, darling! :giggle:
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:icondisrhythmic:
disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
Thank you so much, dear!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013   General Artist
always a pleasure, dizzy darling :tighthug:
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:icongadgetsmith:
Gadgetsmith Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Oh, you humans & you're peculiar need to breed... I don't Understand you...
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:icondisrhythmic:
disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013
Me either. -sigh-
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Gadgetsmith Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I am *S*O* disappointed in My grammar right now... I bitch every time I see somebody use the wrong "your," yet I just freaking did it...

Even though I wasn't drinking, I blame alcohol.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
-pets you- It's okay, I won't tell... :shifty:
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Gadgetsmith Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
You're petting Me now?  ... was licking Me not weird enough?  It's fine, though, really; all My girlfriends treat Me like a puppy for some reason.  Friends that happen to be females, just to clarify - I may as well be a monk.
{whether you tell or not, *I'll* always Know}

I'm changing the subject - I sharpie'd the holy mother of carp out of My cellie today. and it is MUCH better now - red webs on a deep, shiny Purple background, because I'm more than awesome.  How's your day going?
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
Hehehe, maybe you're just cute and fluffy, y'know? ;)

Ooh, I wanna see! :D Well, I just finally wrote something again, which was nice.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013
;)
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
:eyes:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
BAHAHAHAHA...oh man, I laughed so hard at this.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
:giggle:
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Laitma Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student General Artist
Pfffffft, that ending was rather entertaining~ xD (so true of poetry, though xDDD)
And man, I love the honeysepia polaroid description~ <3
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
Thanks, love! :heart:
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really love the absolute contrast between the use of beautiful words & imagery in the main parts of this and that final line -- it really makes that line stand out and gives it a power that would otherwise be lacking. This is very well approached from start to finish and as much as I'd love to give you something useful to build on, all I can really tell you is what you've done well because nothing isn't.

Basically, my criticism is that there's nothing in here for me to criticise. ;) Brilliant.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
Thanks so much! :heart:
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :)
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goldshroom Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Writer
A hilarious observation, though not necessarily true. :D

The only criticism I can come up with right now concerns the eighth verse:
"some supernova poetic awakening that comes"
For some reason the use of "supernova" doesn't quite sit with me, because I'm used to thinking of it as a noun instead of an adjective. Regardless, this is an instant favorite.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
Thanks so much. :heart:
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flummo Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Writer
Featured. :heart: [link]
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
Thank you! :heart:
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flummo Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Writer
Oh my lord I needed this. :XD:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
:la:
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spearofhope Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Can't say I agree with you, but this is a Love Poem :D I quite enjoyed it.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013
:heart:
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some1eleven Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
That's it. "I'm looking for a supernova poetic awakening that comes with losing virginity so I can understand all the wonderful poetry around... And you look like a deeply spiritual person who could share both experiences with me". The most priceless pick up line ever :lmao:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
Ahaha, if anyone ever said that to me, I'd marry them on the spot. :XD:
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GloryousGlory Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student Writer
This is very lovely. Most poems I read are more sad, and it was very refreshing. You have a great grasp on language. I especially loved the line, "some supernova poetic awakening that comes." The ending was very funny too. Great job!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
Thanks so much! :heart:
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GloryousGlory Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome. :3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i love you :heart:

this is me every time i read a poem
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
:iconninjaglompplz: I love you moar. :heart:

join the club
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ColoringTheRain Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I have no words for this, it just made me laugh :XD:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
:heart:
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Student Writer
Haha, this is hilarious, and a wonderfully upbeat change from most of the poetry I've read. And while the topic and the last line are quite playful, the imagery throughout is fantastic. "honeysepia / polaroids unmisting in my head." is really beautiful. Seriously great work. :D
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
Thanks so much! :heart:
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student Writer
No problem! :)
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flightlessheron Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Student Writer
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
Thank you! :heart:
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flightlessheron Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Student Writer
you're welcome! :heart:
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
:lol:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
:heart:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
LOL! THAT LAST LINE.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
Ehehehehe. :dummy:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
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palaeorigamipete Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
XD didn't expect that. the last line... just... :lmao:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
:giggle:
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