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Listen to this aloud here.

sometimes we move like glaciers.

slow sliding continental shift
one particle at a time--
our vantage point unchanged for years
and years will pass with more years behind
and we will remain deceptively still
unhurried.

we carry things with us,
pebbles and twigs we rest on
for years and years--
familiar.

but we can cast back
explore the ages we contain,
kept safe inside ourselves.
each grain of sand held close
protected
whispering of ages long since returned to dust--
ages we have seen grow and die
ages we carry
and preserve.

we move like glaciers
quiet and assured
and years will pass with more years behind
but when time has grown tired,
we will remain.

we will have tales to tell.
For Nick.

Could it be? Decent writing?

I'll read this out loud later. I do quite like it. Critique, as always, is welcome.
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
Thanks. :heart:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
For certain kinds of minds and souls, this sounds very much like the perfect pinnacle of a relationship and so I wonder at the love that there is an that would grow. This goes beyond beautiful & sweet... but you should watch out, I get the feeling that that voice of yours could melt all the glaciers in all the worlds given time and want.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
:blush: Thank you so much. :heart:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
;D I suspect that you're well aware of that last fact, but it's fun to say all the same. You're very much welcome, you wonderfully warm, seductive and exquisite miss :bow:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
Suffice it to say it's not the first time I've heard it, but it never ceases to surprise me all the same. :blush:

You're sweet. :heart:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I thought so! And really? :giggle: Well that I find surprising! You speak with such a soft deliberateness, your voice seems like such a finely tuned tool (even when you're giggling) and it is just so gorgeous. Sunshine and warm honey, to say the least.

:blushes: Just honest, I swear!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
:blush: Oh gosh... :heart:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know! I said the same thing when I heard your voice! :faint:
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tisserande-d-encre Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
Now I feel like a glacier. XD
This is beautiful, love, and amazing reading as well.
Someone already said it, this is quite relaxing. ^^
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
:huggle:
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Laitma Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Student General Artist
Ooooooooh, nice. I like that bit toward the end, "when time grows tired"...
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012
Thank you!! :huggle:
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RiFlight Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"Let's not wait for that opinion to change..." LOL

Seriously... you should do some ASMR recordings :D
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
Haha, you think so? :P
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RiFlight Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Mmmhmm. You could do a relaxing guided meditation or something.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
Hehehe I'll keep that in mind.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012   General Artist
Reading this I was in awe,
then I listened to this and I fell in love.

My old soul is feeling very much appeased right now.

:huggle:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
Oh gosh, darling, thank you so much. <3 You always make me feel all wibbly and special. :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012   General Artist
Oh but you are all kinds of special and wonderful and dizzy magic, you see, and I can't help but take notice and become enraptured! :love:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
:blushes: Aw shucks, hush now. :heart: You're amazing. :huggle:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012   General Artist
:iconlovehugplz:
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cerealnovels Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
This is beautiful.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
Thank you so much. <3
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anisia-gypsy Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
my god... I have goosebumps! You read it beautifully!!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
Oh, thank you love. <3
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juniorel Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012   Writer
I love listening to you read your work, and this piece was particularly beautiful. While listening, I noticed that you, as a reader, absolutely get the importance of silence. You pause at times instead of barreling through, which is especially important for a piece like this, I think.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
Thank you so much! :heart:

Silence seems to speak more than words sometimes.
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thatlibraryguy Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
Read and liked it. Listened to it and loved it. I'm glad you're satisfied with it, it's quite good!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
Thank you. :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
-listens. slips into coma-

lovely write. I'd say better than decent, yeah.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
Coma, huh? :P

Thanks, love. :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"I slip into a coma every time I listen to something beautiful." shamelessly quoting myself.

welcome.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
Aw shucks. <3
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