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i want to remember
the rumbling piano baritones
high notes like hailstones--your hands
running soundless scales.

i want the summer seas
november tides
the vineyard overlook, the olive
trees and sunwarmed coasts.

remember
we filled the empty pages
with whole notes and halftones,
oceans and lovesongs.

we lived, we live
inkstained and drowning
through nights thick with words
and days shot with sound.
For Nick.

Another rewrite, another ocean-sounds side effect. The last stanza is iffy... suggestions welcomed with open arms. :heart:
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Laitma Jan 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Damn, this was just perfect. Loved the rhythmic, weighted feel to this as I read through it, and just, goshdarnit when something's this perfect I just have nothing to say, ok? x:

"days shot with sound", man, what a terrific ending. :heart:
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:icondisrhythmic:
Oh my gosh thank you so much, dear. :heart: That means a lot. :huggle:
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tisserande-d-encre Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
"remember
we filled the empty pages
with whole notes and halftones,
oceans and lovesongs.

we lived, we live
inkstained and drowning
through nights thick with words
and days shot with sound."

Can't this be more lovely?
That Nick is lucky to have you dedicating him things as wonderful as this.
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FuzzyHoser Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Fantastic...but yes, the audio makes it. :heart:
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:icondisrhythmic:
Thank you so much. :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A pleasure! :heart:
I love the audio poetry.
(I'm trying to get brave enough to start my own tumblr thingy soon. I've only recorded a couple thus far.)
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:icondisrhythmic:
Oooh! Let me know if you do, yeah? I'd love to hear. :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Uhh.... [link]

Yeah. :nod:
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FuzzyHoser Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm working on it. (:
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