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i want to remember
the rumbling piano baritones
high notes like hailstones--your hands
running soundless scales.

i want the summer seas
november tides
the vineyard overlook, the olive
trees and sunwarmed coasts.

remember
we filled the empty pages
with whole notes and halftones,
oceans and lovesongs.

we lived, we live
inkstained and drowning
through nights thick with words
and days shot with sound.
For Nick.

Another rewrite, another ocean-sounds side effect. The last stanza is iffy... suggestions welcomed with open arms. :heart:
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Laitma Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Damn, this was just perfect. Loved the rhythmic, weighted feel to this as I read through it, and just, goshdarnit when something's this perfect I just have nothing to say, ok? x:

"days shot with sound", man, what a terrific ending. :heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Oh my gosh thank you so much, dear. :heart: That means a lot. :huggle:
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tisserande-d-encre Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
"remember
we filled the empty pages
with whole notes and halftones,
oceans and lovesongs.

we lived, we live
inkstained and drowning
through nights thick with words
and days shot with sound."

Can't this be more lovely?
That Nick is lucky to have you dedicating him things as wonderful as this.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
:heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Fantastic...but yes, the audio makes it. :heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013
Thank you so much. :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A pleasure! :heart:
I love the audio poetry.
(I'm trying to get brave enough to start my own tumblr thingy soon. I've only recorded a couple thus far.)
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
Oooh! Let me know if you do, yeah? I'd love to hear. :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Uhh.... [link]

Yeah. :nod:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm working on it. (:
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