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I open the door and the apartment is dark and musty cold--that antiseptic not-lived-in kind cold. "Shay." I fumble for the light switch, then hang my keys on the hook with practiced finality. Door locked, backpack dropped, and I'm in the living room. "Shay." Nothing.

There's piles of assorted belongings everywhere: books resting on crumpled sweaters--a belt and a plush toy--empty picture frames on dusty shoeboxes--glass jars full of colored oil. It forms a trail, sharp-cornered and lazy, to the bedroom at the back, and that's where I find you sleeping belly-down on the floor.

I should wake you up and make you dinner because I'm sure you forgot to fix yourself anything, but for a minute I lean on the doorjamb and look at you. Your shirt hiked up a little bit around your narrow waist to small to hold up all but the skinniest of skinny jeans. You're always been thin, almost dangerously so, without seeming to try. Your hair curls in tendrils all over your shoulders, down your back, across the floor.

I shift a little and the floor creaks, and you lift your head and blink bleary bloodshot eyes at me. "Hi."

"Hi." I curl up on the floor next to you. "I see you've been busy."

"I've been cleaning."

"Really?" I flick my eyes over the teetering piles of stuff that dot the floor.

"Well, I didn't finish."

I brush a stray lock of your bangs out of your eyes. "And why the sudden lapse into cleanliness?"

"It's winter," you reply quietly. "I need to get rid of things."

No association is unfounded with you, I've learned that much--but I don't push it. "Let's get dinner."
Oh god, this is awful and poorly written and utterly pointless, I know, but let me explain who Shay is.

Shay is a sad, broken little thing, rail-thin with long black hair and eyelashes to match. I dreamed about her months ago, and she is the most vivid and unique thing my subconscious ever threw at me. I've racked my brains and I can't think of a single person my brain might have put her together out of. The dream culminated with me dying for her. When someone is that obviously important, I pay attention.

Anyway. She waltzed back through my brain today and I decided screw it. So here she is.
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palaeorigamipete Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
how is this poorly written? :facepalm: it's fucking amazing! =D
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
:blush: Thanks so much. <3
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palaeorigamipete Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome! =D
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Laitma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow, this was great--but it was even cooler just hearing about how she's planted herself so firmly in your mind, hahahah! I love your description of her, it's great--and hey, writing's something that just needs to be done when it hits ya, no shame in it! C:
So, question, is Shay's hair long and curly or straight? :3 Is she fair-skinned or darker?
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012
heehee, thanks! ^^

Really really long and straight. And she was vampire-pale. :P
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Laitma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Student General Artist
Uoooooooooooooh, a gorgeous combination~ *-*
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012
I know, right? She was (is?) incredibly beautiful. :D
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Laitma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Student General Artist
Never let her go, Dizz! 8C
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012
-clings to imaginary figment- D:
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Laitma Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Student General Artist
I spend all my time planning out how one fictional character's gonna beat up another, hah!
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