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"If I were an element on the periodic table," you say, "which would I be?"

I meet your upside-down gaze. You're lying belly-up on my bed, your head hanging off the end and your hair pooling on the carpet.

"Neon."

"Why?"

Scrambling for a reason, I nudge my notebook away and turn, straddling my desk chair backwards. You continue to stare, owlish in your attention. "Must there be a why?"

"Yes."

Chin on wrist on chairback. "You are… colorful."

"That's cheating." You blink slowly. "Elemental neon is not inherently colorful."

"Let me think then."

Owl eyes give silent assent.

Some things end up meaning so much to you. You didn't even blink that time I nearly broke my hand when knuckles met wall stud in a fit of misplaced rage—no, you grabbed me by the belt loops and skillfully incapacitated me, closing the bedroom door with your shoulder. Somehow, though, this means more to you.

"You," I begin. You sit up on the bed.

"Are." I slowly roll the chair over to you, the plastic wheels catching on the carpet.

For a minute you simply look at me.

"Mercury."

"Really?" You lean your elbows on the back of the chair, eyes impossibly huge. "Why?"

"You're light…" My fingers work their way into the warm tangle of your hair. "And delicate. And, under the right circumstances…" I pull you into a soft, brief kiss. "You melt at room temperature."
I... don't usually write things like this. Did I need a distraction from the Trig paper sitting on my desk? Yes. I really did.

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PS: This is still somehow the most productive I've been in a very long time.
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Tom-MarvoloRiddle Feb 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like the ending, so...cute ;)
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Laitma Feb 18, 2012  Student General Artist
Hahahaha, absolutely fantastic, wow! I loved this--the dialogue is terse but not unnatural-sounding, and the actions you describe are just enough to give us the bones and let us flesh out the surroudings. Love that one short paragraph about what happened before--just, something about "closing the bedroom door with your shoulder" really resonates with me. Perfect. <3

I also don't know whether you intended this or not, but the whole time (since I knew the title) I was thinking to myself the fact that Mercury is poisonous... and the incredible properties it has in its liquid "quicksilver" form. ; )
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:icondisrhythmic:
Oh, thank you so much! I was worried a bit about it being too sparse, so I'm glad you could picture it well enough. :D

...I didn't, but dangit, I wish I did. XD That would've added a whole 'nother layer to it... :D
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anisia-gypsy Feb 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
cute!!
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gothicchick23 Feb 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love it!! Very good job. I would love to know about owl eyes some more though :)
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:icondisrhythmic:
Thanks. :D I might write a little more about these two, who knows? :)
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gothicchick23 Feb 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
good idea :)
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