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Chloe was born in the pouring rain and blinding dark, under a thunderstorm that cut power to five counties and lingered for days. Her first memories were damp and earthy and fresh--watercolor paintings of wildflower fields, thunderheads, and pale yellow dawns.

She grew up with summers swimming in lurid heat and trembling cicada calls; in winters soft with snowfall and tree limbs upraised to the icy light. She was a tiny sun in herself, glowing effortlessly. Plants reached up to her, swayed with her voice. Given enough space and enough time, her hands could have delved into the earth and come back up trailing with trees and vines, with berries falling from her fingertips and thick pale roots curled around her wrists.

I met Chloe in the middle of one electric summer, when the heat was aggressively breathtaking and I had to continuously swipe sweat from my eyelashes. Chloe was a breath of undying spring--cool to the touch. She tasted like almonds and cinnamon and clean, wet dirt, and like the dirt, she rubbed off into my hair and under my fingernails. We knelt together in her garden, a lush wild tangle of herbs and flowers that burst through the fence trying valiantly to contain it. Camellias for luck, irises for hope, holly for happiness.

Chloe was keenly attuned to mortality. Each winter, she watched her impatiens and marigolds wither with the frost, leaving quiet skeletons to guard the dormant perennials until the spring--watched as they became part of the earth again and the tiny seedlings of the summer before poked through the ground to take their place.

She told me her plans one chilly autumn night, lying in a cornfield under the stars. "When I die," she whispered, low and sad and melodic like rain, "promise me you'll bury me under an oak tree and plant a garden. Creeping thyme, and daisies, and white chrysanthemums, and heather and poppies and orchids. Plant foxglove for the butterflies and bluebells for the bees and lupines for the hummingbirds. Promise me. Promise me."

I promised. The sleeping crows were our only witnesses.
Oh look! Prose! ^^ A character study, because I've always liked the name Chloe.

Rough and a little heavy-handed, I know. Suggestions welcomed. <3

10/24 - Minor edits, and a small change to the ending.
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GDeyke Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012   Writer
One of my favorites of your work, from what I've seen of it. It's the imagery that I love here, again.

This line especially: She tasted like almonds and cinnamon and clean, wet dirt, and like the dirt, she rubbed off into my hair and under my fingernails. Beautiful. :heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012
Thank you so much. :huggle:
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palaeorigamipete Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconbummiesplz:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
<3
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palaeorigamipete Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:love:
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debc6582 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
This is lovely! You made me feel like I was there in the cornfield under the stars along with you.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
Thank you so much! <3
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Laitma Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Student General Artist
Ooooooh, gorgeous, gorgeous! I really love the third paragraph in, and the ending, ohman~ :heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012
N'awww... :blush: Thank you, love. <3 <3 <3
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful portrait :love:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012
Thanks, love. :heart: Glad you liked it. ^^
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice imagery!! I now like the name Chloe :iconshaplz:

-Avy
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012
Thank you! :D It's a great name, innit? ^^
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sure is!! I hope I won't meet anyone whose name is Chloe and who'll be mean and mess up the name for me ;)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is a lovely character.
nice use of the senses throughout.

I liked her hands could have delved into the earth and come back up trailing with trees and vines, with berries falling from her fingertips and thick pale roots curled around her wrists.

and this: She tasted like almonds and cinnamon and clean, wet dirt, and like the dirt, she rubbed off into my hair and under my fingernails.
I always love when taste and smells are used.

my only suggestion is maybe changing this "the fence that tried valiantly" to "the fence trying valiantly" :shrug: up to you.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Thank you so much. <3

YES. asdfhjkl thank you! I knew that line was clunky. :hug:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :)

haha, no problem :hug:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
<3
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ColoringTheRain Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I saw the title, and I have a friend named Chloe who has a dA and I freaked out a little because I was like, "since when does she write poetry??" then I realized her username isn't actually Chloe... haha
Amazing prose anyway, I think it's great for autumn.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Hehehe, nice. XD

Thanks! <3
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tisserande-d-encre Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Student Writer
Nice little prose. Lots of flowers! :dummy:
I like this one, really really like it. Chloe seems to evoke all that indeed. ^^
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Flowers! :woohoo:

Thank you. <3
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tisserande-d-encre Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks for writing.
I think I just got the smell of a whole garden!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Oh, I'm so glad. <3 <3 <3
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