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     I loved a blacksmith once, back when the sand still clogged up my soul. It was only far after that I began to love the desert too.

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     Underneath the casual noise--glass on wood, heat-smothered conversation, worn cards slapped down in careful triumph--there was this low, thrumming quiet that wouldn't be broken. He spoke in sepia undertones. "We're getting out."

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     Hot iron smells like hot blood, like blood that's been poured out under the white Arizona sun. It's something you don't forget easy, like the taste of whiskey or the plasma patterns left on your eyelids after watching fire all night. It sticks.

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      My childhood was fed on medical books, and I've got this pain right behind my eyes and I wonder if this is what it feels like being lobotomized. Of course the brain has no nerve endings, but the hurt has to manifest itself somewhere.
I kept thinking more more more but I guess sometimes you have to write deserts with desert writing.
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PaniCrusnik09 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
This definitely deserves a DD. I'm not quite sure how to recommend you, though. :-(
Absolutely love it. So eloquently expressed, so powerful and impacting.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013
Thank you so much! That means a lot to me. :heart:
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Hot iron smells like hot blood, like blood that's been poured out under the white Arizona sun. It's something you don't forget easy, like the taste of whiskey or the plasma patterns left on your eyelids after watching fire all night. It sticks.


This reads like an exerpt from a book I might not want to put down, if that makes sense. :heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
Oh gosh. That might be one of the most amazing compliments I've ever received. :heart: Thanks so much. I'm glad it resonated. :huggle:
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A pleasure, dear. :heart:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012   Writer
Congratulations on the DLD, *disrhythmic -- this is a fine piece and it ends perfectly. Thank you. :+fav:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
Thank you! <3
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012   General Artist
This struck a chord with me and I can't really put my finger on why exactly other than how beautiful your way with words truly is:heart: Congratulations on the well-deserved DLD, love! :huggle:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012
Thank you so much, Sammylove. :heart: That means a lot to me. :D
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012   General Artist
You are as always, most welcome:heart:
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:heart:
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:love:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012
Thank you so much! <3
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How lovely. :)
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
Thanks. <3
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You're welcome! :)
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Lovely vivid things. :coffeecup:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012
Thank you. <3
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Laitma Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Student General Artist
Ooooohhhhhhh, just lovely. The first three sections really work for me, the details are so terse but perfectly placed~ The last one doesn't quite connect with the rest for me, I'm just missing that tiny link, but overall this is stunningggggg~ ♥
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
:hug: thank you!! <3

That last bit does need work... -sets to pondering-
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doublethefun Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
this is amazing!!!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
Thank you. <3
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This is beautifully written. :heart: It was a real joy to read aloud.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
:heart: Thank you so much.
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You're welcome. :)
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juniorel Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012   Writer
Wow. Parts two and three are especially wow. You're prose is like poetry. I love it. And I'm currently living in AZ, so I definitely felt those descriptions.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012
Thanks so much. <3
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:heart:
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:hug:
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enigmaticsmile Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"Of course the brain has no nerve endings, but the hurt has to manifest itself somewhere"

Wiser words may never have been spoken.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012
Thank you, love. <3
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my pleasure, Mareada...
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RiFlight Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's weird, but then again I've never been normal, but my favorite part was "Plasma patterns" because I've never had a good way to describe those. Ha. =P

As always you have produced some fine prose here. I like the phrasing that you use in your writing.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012
Aw, thank you. <3
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:heart: I just love everything you write. I always read it outloud, it comes out so smoothly it's just wonderful!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012
Thank you thank you thank you. <3
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You're very welcome!
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<3
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